Cat Fished by.....

Status
Not open for further replies.

Basra

LOVE is a product of Doqoniimo mixed with lust
Let Them Eat Cake
VIP
So Reiko Hassan prepared for her special date. Her Aunty, Basra Barkhad Abdi fixed her with a distant nephew. It was supposed to be a very good date. This special boy was intended for the shy Reiko. Her date hails from a very good noble family connection, and had impeccable personal merits of hard working. He is a good popular uber driver. Reiko started the day with wearing a flattering winter dress that covered her some what half way skinny arms. She had delightful chubby red cheeks that Aunty Basra likes to pinch in tease. Her feet are smaller than average Xalimo specie feet stuck out like a sore thumb, and in-congruent to the rest of her otherwise none -slim body. A Beautiful body or figure though. Reiko called Aunty Basra to express she was nervous, & she was waiting impatiently for her date to arrive. Basra instructed her to calm down, and just breath in & out in intervals. It is a sunny, unusual summerish December day, eve of Xmas. While they were chit chating on what they were doing, the door bell rang. Reiko nervously said her good byes to the gossipy Aunty Basra.. She went to the mirror, powdered herself on the cheek with Imaan makeup for black people. She smiled to make sure nothing stuck in her adorable large rabbit teeth. Her lipstick, power red was on point. Then she decided it was not good enough. She quickly rubbed it off, and applied supper hot pink. Smiled & winked at herself. She rant to the door and opened it.


At the door stood a very tall skinny farah with a rare look of the old Somali people of the 1970s. Super Dark in complexion, up to the lips. Nose was definitely eagle like, in a Cushitic old style. Glorious afro, thick in texture, almost unmovable, missing an Caadey traditional brush accessory! His chest was on point, broad to the point of not matching the rest of the geeljiire skinny half-masculine body form. He smiled and immediately exposed his super white teeth that reflected on his dark skin, a good balance enhanced by those traditional sexy dark madoow somali lips color, but considered witchy here in the west. For some reason, red natural lips are considered beautiful here in the west as opposed to the reverse which in Somalia is considered a pretty common novelty. Golden stained teeth is another pretty novelty in Somalia. Such is diversity of beauty in strange Somalia.


"Hi Welcome. Nice to meet you walaal. Welcome" Spoke Reiko, in an oddly affectionate & warm manner.. I guess she was in a some sort of pleased and not shocked mood. Obviously pleased to see everything outwardly matching well to her odd traditional standard, she allowed a little eye lash wiggle.. She shook hands with him and allowed him to step into her well decorated living room.



"Your name is Armadhillo Right? " Asked Reiko nervously, and focusing eagle eyes on those dark black lips.


"Yeah. Yeah. Armadillo Sheikh Samaaale. Thats my name. " The date finally spoke, exposing his somewhat strained half way deep voice that was almost fake and pretending. Reiko was neither turned off nor turned on, but intrigued. They went to the sofa, sat down, only to suddenly stand up to go get him some Faanto. The gentleman stood up with her simultaneously, allowing her to excuse herself to the kitchen. Such a gentleman thought Miss charmed Reiko. It took her at least 10 minutes to prepare the Faanto and some ice. As Reiko was about to go back to serve the drinks, she got a text from Gossipy Aunty Basra.



"Eedo Maacaan--i am soooo sorry----my nephew did not make it to your date. He is sick. He just called me right now. So sorry huuno. But he did send his best friend who is a girl to tell you. She is marehaan. Her name is Daughter of Samaale. She should have been with you by now.




Reiko replied "FCUK!"



She quickly peeped through the door knob of her kitchen door. And saw something close to fainting causing disturbance.


The fake Armadhillo Sheikh Samaale un-buttoned her shirt, was adjusting her naaso with the multiple layers of tape she pasted around her chest, around her back to make her chest look flat & naaso-less, and casually buttoned back her shirt.



Reiko slowly retreated backwards, locked the kitchen door, crouched into the kitchen closet & dialed 911 - Hellooo Police????
 
Last edited:

A_A

Islamic Fanfiction Writer
So Reiko Hassan prepared for her special date. Her Aunty, Basra Barkhad Abdi fixed her with a distant nephew. It was supposed to be a very good date. This special boy was intended for the shy Reiko. Her date hails from a very good noble family connection, and had impeccable personal merits of hard working. He is a good popular uber driver. Reiko started the day with wearing a flattering winter dress that covered her some what half way skinny arms. She had delightfully chubby red cheeks that Aunty Basra likes to pinch in tease. Her feet are smaller than average Xalimo specie feet stuck out like a sore thumb, and in-congruent to the rest of her otherwise none -slim body. A Beautiful body or figure though. Reiko called Aunty Basra to express she was nervous, & she was waiting impatiently for her date to arrive. Basra instructed her to calm down, and just breath in & out in intervals. It is a sunny, unusual summerish December day, eve of Xmas. While they were chit chating on what they were doing, the door bell rang. Reiko nervously said her good byes to the gossipy Aunty Basra.. She went to the mirror, powdered herself on the cheek with Imaan makeup for black people. She smiled to make sure nothing stuck in her adorable large rabbit teeth. Her lipstick, power red was on point. Then she decided it was not good enough. She quickly rubbed it off, and applied super hot pink. Smiled & winked at herself. She ran to the door and opened it.


At the door stood a very tall skinny farah with a rare look of the old Somali people of the 1970s. Super Dark in complexion, up to the lips. Nose was definitely eagle like, in a Cushitic old style. Glorious afro, thick in texture, almost unmovable, missing an Caadey traditional brush accessory! His chest was on point, broad to the point of not matching the rest of the geeljiire skinny half-masculine body form. He smiled and immediately exposed his super white teeth that reflected on his dark skin, a good balance enhanced by those traditional sexy dark madoow somali lips color, but considered witchy here in the west. For some reason, red natural lips are considered beautiful here in the west as opposed to the reverse which in Somalia is considered a pretty common novelty. Golden stained teeth is another pretty novelty in Somalia. Such is diversity of beauty in strange Somalia.


"Hi Welcome. Nice to meet you walaal. Welcome" Spoke Reiko, in an oddly affectionate & warm manner. I guess she was in a some sort of pleased and not shocked mood. Obviously pleased to see everything outwardly matching well to her odd traditional standard, she allowed a little eye lash wiggle.. She shook hands with him and allowed him to step into her well decorated living room.



"Your name is Armadhillo Right? " Asked Reiko nervously, and focusing eagle eyes on those dark black lips.


"Yeah. Yeah. Armadillo Sheikh Samaaale. That’s my name." The date finally spoke, exposing his somewhat strained half way deep voice that was almost fake and pretending. Reiko was neither turned off nor turned on, but intrigued. They went to the sofa, sat down, only to suddenly stand up to go get him some Faanto. The gentleman stood up with her simultaneously, allowing her to excuse herself to the kitchen. Such a gentleman thought Miss charmed Reiko. It took her at least 10 minutes to prepare the Faanto and some ice. As Reiko was about to go back to serve the drinks, she got a text from Gossipy Aunty Basra.



"Eedo Maacaan--i am soooo sorry----my nephew did not make it to your date. He is sick. He just called me right now. So sorry huuno. But he did send his best friend who is a girl to tell you. She is marehaan. Her name is Daughter of Samaale. She should have been with you by now.”




Reiko replied "FCUK!"



She quickly peeped through the door knob of her kitchen door. And saw something close to fainting causing disturbance.


The fake Armadhillo Sheikh Samaale un-buttoned her shirt, was adjusting her naaso with the multiple layers of tape she pasted around her chest, around her back to make her chest look flat & naaso-less, and casually buttoned back her shirt.



Reiko slowly retreated backwards, locked the kitchen door, crouched into the kitchen closet & dialed 911 - Hellooo Police????
Overall it’s a weird story, couple of grammar mistakes though. When characters are talking that automatically makes a new paragraph. Don’t start sentences with and, but, or any other word which is similar.
 

Basra

LOVE is a product of Doqoniimo mixed with lust
Let Them Eat Cake
VIP
Overall it’s a weird story, couple of grammar mistakes though. When characters are talking that automatically makes a new paragraph. Don’t start sentences with and, but, or any other word which is similar.


Hhmmmm i am intrigued

Why is it a werid story>??? lol elaborate
 

A_A

Islamic Fanfiction Writer
Hhmmmm i am intrigued

Why is it a werid story>??? lol elaborate
Your writing style is weird, as in it’s unique. I haven’t seen it, I’m so use to uptight and overly professional writing. I haven’t read fiction in a hot minute lol. Plus the twist in the end, wtf :drakelaugh:

It’s more of a one-shot than a structured story. This reminded of my fanfiction years. :denzelnigga: Wallahi I was a beast back then.
 

Basra

LOVE is a product of Doqoniimo mixed with lust
Let Them Eat Cake
VIP
Your writing style is weird, as in it’s unique. I haven’t seen it, I’m so use to uptight and overly professional writing. I haven’t read fiction in a hot minute lol. Plus the twist in the end, wtf :drakelaugh:

It’s more of a one-shot than a structured story. This reminded of my fanfiction years. :denzelnigga: Wallahi I was a beast back then.


AA thanks. So having a unique writing sytle is your FIRST forced compliment i am getting from you.
denzelnigga.png




drakelaugh.png
U didnt like the end twist? Be honest, was it is shocking or surprising for u? Did u expect it ? Or were u lost in the story expecting a generic interesting date narration?



Yeah, i am too lazy to make a structure long story. If i want to i can but my attention span is short. I wanted a snap shot of a story, like a scene in a movie or a play but not in dialogue but a mixture of dialogue and story style telling. :)
 

A_A

Islamic Fanfiction Writer
AA thanks. So having a unique writing sytle is your FIRST forced compliment i am getting from you.
denzelnigga.png




drakelaugh.png
U didnt like the end twist? Be honest, was it is shocking or surprising for u? Did u expect it ? Or were u lost in the story expecting a generic interesting date narration?



Yeah, i am too lazy to make a structure long story. If i want to i can but my attention span is short. I wanted a snap shot of a story, like a scene in a movie or a play but not in dialogue but a mixture of dialogue and story style telling. :)
Oh shit you got me! The writing was a bit confusing to keep track of, mainly due to the characters dialogue structure. Now I kinda see the play structure, but it’s still wrong to look at. Also your grammar can be your downfall, at times the descriptions are nice and you can almost see the story happening before you. Only for a grammar issue to ruin all that. Grammar is like your face, and the plot is your personality. Just as people will judge each other based on looks, your story is immediately judged by it’s grammar. Even the worst stories are tolerable because of the grammar. The twist, combined with a cliffhanger makes the story intriguing to read.

I did not see that Mulan ass twist I was caught off guard wtf:pachah1:
This needs to polished into a nice story, it has some potential. For a story influenced by a little known forum on the internet, it’s interesting, not Shakespeare level though. Interesting none the less.
 

Basra

LOVE is a product of Doqoniimo mixed with lust
Let Them Eat Cake
VIP
Oh shit you got me! The writing was a bit confusing to keep track of, mainly due to the characters dialogue structure. Now I kinda see the play structure, but it’s still wrong to look at. Also your grammar can be your downfall, at times the descriptions are nice and you can almost see the story happening before you. Only for a grammar issue to ruin all that. Grammar is like your face, and the plot is your personality. Just as people will judge each other based on looks, your story is immediately judged by it’s grammar. Even the worst stories are tolerable because of the grammar. The twist, combined with a cliffhanger makes the story intriguing to read.

I did not see that Mulan ass twist I was caught off guard wtf:pachah1:
This needs to polished into a nice story, it has some potential. For a story influenced by a little known forum on the internet, it’s interesting, not Shakespeare level though. Interesting none the less.


Do u really expect me to take your critique seriously?? I mean, who says u r a grammar queen?


pachah1.png
pachah1.png
pachah1.png
pachah1.png
pachah1.png
pachah1.png
pachah1.png
 

A_A

Islamic Fanfiction Writer
Do u really expect me to take your critique seriously?? I mean, who says u r a grammar queen?


pachah1.png
pachah1.png
pachah1.png
pachah1.png
pachah1.png
pachah1.png
pachah1.png
True, I’m shit. I write a lot during the day so when I’m on here I just stop caring.
Excuse me, Did you just assume my gender?:williamswtf:
 

Basra

LOVE is a product of Doqoniimo mixed with lust
Let Them Eat Cake
VIP
True, I’m shit. I write a lot during the day so when I’m on here I just stop caring.
Excuse me, Did you just assume my gender?:williamswtf:


Oh my bad! LOOOOL


If i don't recall correctly, you once asked my opinion about your writing here in the forums under another popular name that i don't have to expose you with. Under that name, you repeatedly wanted my opinion about your writing, which in light of this rampant negative critique tells me you are jealous of my writing! LOOOOL
 

A_A

Islamic Fanfiction Writer
Oh my bad! LOOOOL


If i don't recall correctly, you once asked my opinion about your writing here in the forums under another popular name that i don't have to expose you with. Under that name, you repeatedly wanted my opinion about your writing, which in light of this rampant negative critique tells me you are jealous of my writing! LOOOOL
Sorry, you’ve got the wrong wrong person. I don’t think my critique was all that negative though. Sure I can be a bit mean, but writing means a lot to me. It’s nice seeing improvements and change.
I have lurked here for quite a while, I think I know what your talking about though.
Was the story erotic in nature?
 

Basra

LOVE is a product of Doqoniimo mixed with lust
Let Them Eat Cake
VIP
Sorry, you’ve got the wrong wrong person. I don’t think my critique was all that negative though. Sure I can be a bit mean, but writing means a lot to me. It’s nice seeing improvements and change.
I have lurked here for quite a while, I think I know what your talking about though.
Was the story erotic in nature?


LOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOL




u r soooooo funny! Seriously almost adorable.
 

A_A

Islamic Fanfiction Writer
LOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOL




u r soooooo funny! Seriously almost adorable.
:damnmusic:I think I know now
I swear it’s not me! Sure I use to write...certain things, but this is a case of mistaken identity! :ileycry:
You gotta trust me on this!
 

Basra

LOVE is a product of Doqoniimo mixed with lust
Let Them Eat Cake
VIP
:damnmusic:I think I know now
I swear it’s not me! Sure I use to write...certain things, but this is a case of mistaken identity! :ileycry:
You gotta trust me on this!


Ok go back to your "Sweden" thread dear.
 

Gibiin-Udug

Crowned Queen of Puntland. Supporter of PuntExit
So Reiko Hassan prepared for her special date. Her Aunty, Basra Barkhad Abdi fixed her with a distant nephew. It was supposed to be a very good date. This special boy was intended for the shy Reiko. Her date hails from a very good noble family connection, and had impeccable personal merits of hard working. He is a good popular uber driver. Reiko started the day with wearing a flattering winter dress that covered her some what half way skinny arms. She had delightful chubby red cheeks that Aunty Basra likes to pinch in tease. Her feet are smaller than average Xalimo specie feet stuck out like a sore thumb, and in-congruent to the rest of her otherwise none -slim body. A Beautiful body or figure though. Reiko called Aunty Basra to express she was nervous, & she was waiting impatiently for her date to arrive. Basra instructed her to calm down, and just breath in & out in intervals. It is a sunny, unusual summerish December day, eve of Xmas. While they were chit chating on what they were doing, the door bell rang. Reiko nervously said her good byes to the gossipy Aunty Basra.. She went to the mirror, powdered herself on the cheek with Imaan makeup for black people. She smiled to make sure nothing stuck in her adorable large rabbit teeth. Her lipstick, power red was on point. Then she decided it was not good enough. She quickly rubbed it off, and applied supper hot pink. Smiled & winked at herself. She rant to the door and opened it.


At the door stood a very tall skinny farah with a rare look of the old Somali people of the 1970s. Super Dark in complexion, up to the lips. Nose was definitely eagle like, in a Cushitic old style. Glorious afro, thick in texture, almost unmovable, missing an Caadey traditional brush accessory! His chest was on point, broad to the point of not matching the rest of the geeljiire skinny half-masculine body form. He smiled and immediately exposed his super white teeth that reflected on his dark skin, a good balance enhanced by those traditional sexy dark madoow somali lips color, but considered witchy here in the west. For some reason, red natural lips are considered beautiful here in the west as opposed to the reverse which in Somalia is considered a pretty common novelty. Golden stained teeth is another pretty novelty in Somalia. Such is diversity of beauty in strange Somalia.


"Hi Welcome. Nice to meet you walaal. Welcome" Spoke Reiko, in an oddly affectionate & warm manner.. I guess she was in a some sort of pleased and not shocked mood. Obviously pleased to see everything outwardly matching well to her odd traditional standard, she allowed a little eye lash wiggle.. She shook hands with him and allowed him to step into her well decorated living room.



"Your name is Armadhillo Right? " Asked Reiko nervously, and focusing eagle eyes on those dark black lips.


"Yeah. Yeah. Armadillo Sheikh Samaaale. Thats my name. " The date finally spoke, exposing his somewhat strained half way deep voice that was almost fake and pretending. Reiko was neither turned off nor turned on, but intrigued. They went to the sofa, sat down, only to suddenly stand up to go get him some Faanto. The gentleman stood up with her simultaneously, allowing her to excuse herself to the kitchen. Such a gentleman thought Miss charmed Reiko. It took her at least 10 minutes to prepare the Faanto and some ice. As Reiko was about to go back to serve the drinks, she got a text from Gossipy Aunty Basra.



"Eedo Maacaan--i am soooo sorry----my nephew did not make it to your date. He is sick. He just called me right now. So sorry huuno. But he did send his best friend who is a girl to tell you. She is marehaan. Her name is Daughter of Samaale. She should have been with you by now.




Reiko replied "FCUK!"



She quickly peeped through the door knob of her kitchen door. And saw something close to fainting causing disturbance.


The fake Armadhillo Sheikh Samaale un-buttoned her shirt, was adjusting her naaso with the multiple layers of tape she pasted around her chest, around her back to make her chest look flat & naaso-less, and casually buttoned back her shirt.



Reiko slowly retreated backwards, locked the kitchen door, crouched into the kitchen closet & dialed 911 - Hellooo Police????
A whole story about moi?

Basra I'm flattered and kind of offended at the same time.
 

Basra

LOVE is a product of Doqoniimo mixed with lust
Let Them Eat Cake
VIP
A whole story about moi?

Basra I'm flattered and kind of offended at the same time.


U should be flattered dear, it is an honor to include you in my story. I hope Jerome aka Jake doesn't mind.
 

Gibiin-Udug

Crowned Queen of Puntland. Supporter of PuntExit
U should be flattered dear, it is an honor to include you in my story. I hope Jerome aka Jake doesn't mind.
I don't know how to feel you've honored and offended me at the same time.

You're the dollar store version of Shakespeare, without the wit and way of words.


I appreciate you Basra buran, never change.
 
Status
Not open for further replies.
Top